When I work up I fort I was dreaming but I wasn't. I went in a goft ball and I saw a crick and it was fun I got to do one trick too.I went in a naver one and it was Ice scathing then I went in the last one and it was magics and it was fun and cool.Then I went to people to ark if I could sleep in there house and stay and one of them said yes too.
By Ashton
This sounds like a very exciting time Ashton! You have a great imagination and you have taken me on a real journey here. I wouldn't have been able to think of all of these wonderful ideas.
ReplyDeleteMaybe to improve you could describe how you felt - were you excited? Scared? Nervous? This way the reader will be able to find out more about your character.
Well done - keep writing!
Mr Connor
Team 100wc
Derby, England